First of all I would like to say you introduction is
eye catching. The details of the scenery of BHC is descriptive, making the
reader visualize being at the scene. It
is very clear that your paper is about the lens of Frank Norris, Polk Street.
Your ideas shifted from what the man looking in the mirror would see BHC Lawn
and then circulated it into your thoughts of the lawn. It was very interesting
as how you explain that you just seen BHC as a place where people just come and
go, not worrying about more than meets the eye. Using the lens of Polk Street I
can fully see what you are trying to portray throughout the paper, starting
from dusk to dawn. Your essay also flows
very well. I would just say to add a little more detail of your lens of how you
see the lawn, but overall great rough draft!
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